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Silly Dreams

You're a silly dreamer.
You can't ride that satin cloud.
Your eyes are fixed on a sky too high.
You're hypnotized by those beautiful shades of blue,

and gray.

You've built a long ladder of lies.
Don't
         climb
                  off!

The silver lining            hold your weight.
                       won't

Dreams are dreams.
They're thin as your cloud,
and below is the ground.
It's waiting to break you.
What will you do?

Dream on, boy.
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Sometimes it's good to dream.

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:iconmaranga:
Welcome back :) I particularly enjoyed the first three and a half lines (don't ask me why... "shades" just doesn't do it for me here, though its foreshadowing of "gray" is admirable). Love the "long ladder of lies" and your sagging "won't" is fun, if a little gimmicky for my taste :)

"bellow" should be "below", I guess...

...still smiling, thank you... "Dream on"!

:)

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Believe me, you're better off not thinking about my :gallery: poems.
I live on Free Rice.
:iconemdreb:
i appreciate you.

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bex_x
:iconotterski:
:licking: You know what? Lick my tongue.

I appreciate you too :P
:iconemdreb:
score! i'm putting up a new one now.

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bex_x
:iconotterski:
For you, I was thinking about getting rid of "shades" and just saying "...beautiful blues." but then It'd have to be grays as well. Grays just doesn't work as well as gray. :slow:

I did fix the spelling mistake though! I don't the ground will be doing any shouting today.
:iconmaranga:
"...beautiful blues
and shades

of gray."?

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Believe me, you're better off not thinking about my :gallery: poems.
I live on Free Rice.
:iconotterski:
Well. I'll be blunt. It's a pun. It's partly a reference to the above person's eyes. If I disassociate blue and gray, it loses half its meaning.
:iconmaranga:
Blunt is fine :) I take your point!

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Believe me, you're better off not thinking about my :gallery: poems.
I live on Free Rice.

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